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The sunset on a cold Monday as Ross walked down the street exchanging daunting gazes to every person he met. His past a mystery, concealed by the shadows of mystery. Almost as if he was hiding from reality.  Echoing screams filled his head as he tried to separate dream from life and nightmare from existence. He turned a corner his head overflowing with ghastly judgment. The words seemed to echo… ‘Pain, Safety Life, Death’ but one word reoccurred every time, ‘delusion’. He tried to brush of these pessimistic memories (if that is what you could call them) and remember his duty.
He fell to the floor as the overwhelming shadows seemed to cover his brain. He couldn’t submit. If he did it would all be lost. A voice seemed to say ‘remember your duty’ but he was lost inside his head. He seemed to fall through his mind. He screamed and as he climbed up in front of him stood a beast of dismay a illusion, no not a illusion for now he remembers. He pulls his hand towards his chest and the darkness seemed to draw towards him. In his hand he holds a pitch black blade.
With one skilful swing he cuts of the beasts arm and simply grunts. This to him was like swatting flies. Nothing more then a sport.  He swung the blade once again severing the beasts head, it fell to the floor. Ross’ blade deteriorated to the shadows and he fell to the floor and screamed once again….
For he understands now…
©2009-2010 Black-Genesis96
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Author's Comments

A new improved version of my hellfire chapter 1
It uses a new perspective of Ross to show a much more darker side to his job

I thought i could have done much better with the orginal.

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:iconlaughingcarmine68:
I still think it lacks something...

Oh yeah, that bit of description for Ross, sounds like he has schizophrenia I think.

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I'm amazed at one thing. And I'm not that sure what that 'thing' is.
:iconblack-genesis96:
More action?
More Suspense?
A rubbish love story about 3 teenagers?

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Well Make 'Em Eat Grilled Tofu Dipped In Miso On a Stick!
:iconlaughingcarmine68:
Ross has schizotronica.


That and I don't like the whole demon slayer idea.

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I'm amazed at one thing. And I'm not that sure what that 'thing' is.
:iconblack-genesis96:
Its actualy not demon slaying anymore...
it was just a embodiment of his inner feelings.
But that becomes more obvious later in the story

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Well Make 'Em Eat Grilled Tofu Dipped In Miso On a Stick!
:iconlaughingcarmine68:
He has schizotronica.

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I'm amazed at one thing. And I'm not that sure what that 'thing' is.
:iconblack-genesis96:
LOL yer he does..
he also a mysterious backround which i explained in what im writing now.
Do you mean the name i made up for multiple personalitys... XD

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Well Make 'Em Eat Grilled Tofu Dipped In Miso On a Stick!
:iconlaughingcarmine68:
Yarr
:lmao:

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I'm amazed at one thing. And I'm not that sure what that 'thing' is.
:iconamber-the-raccon:
O_O

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Amber-the-Raccoon

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